I want to add a few more stuff and edit more ......
But here my draft =)
Speech
Let's go back in time, your lost on
a deserted island, it's midnight your life depends on whether you escape or not.
You search franticly for anything that may be able to help you... and you find
a calculator, pencil, and a piece a paper. Luckily you've been paying attention
to the dreadful lectures from your teachers and as a student you've spent
countless hours memorizing complicated math problems, physics laws, and
astrology. So you start working out your escape plan. Education well spent
Now, let's fast forward to the
modern day. You're stuck in the same situation again...... You've forgotten
everything you've learned at school and all hope seems lost. But wait, you
remembered your phone! So you search up the deserted island your stuck on and
find your way back safe. Problem solved.
The internet has changed the world.
We no longer need to rely on the old methods of solving problems such as navigating.
But we have advantages of modern technology and the Internet.
Technology now runs in the veins of
society, it is the fuel that drives our lives, and is an essential tool for
survival. Technology has brought luxury in the life of every common man.
The internet first went public in
1989, but it wasn't until many years it become widely known and used. By 2000
the Internet truly went 'main stream' changing the society and our behaviors
drastically. However, education has not yet changed with the stream of modern development.
Unlike the old days, many
university graduated students suffer from getting jobs in their field of study.
About half of the graduates are not working in the profession they've majored
in, and one quarter are unemployed. To me, this sounds like a terrible outcome
for thousands of dollars spent on the educational system.
Back in the days when internet was
not available, all intrinsic learning was based on memorization. However, Kathy
Harris, a managing director for the recruitment and placement of professionals
for corporate growth states that, "The ability to problem solve and the
ongoing dedication to learning new technologies or solutions
that will continue to advance in the changing workplace" are what large,
successful corporations are looking for in new hires. Therefore, if top corporations are looking for hires who are critical
thinking individuals, who think outside of the box, why is the education system
still valuing wrote memory? Shouldn't schools prepare students to thrive in a
constantly changing, modern environment?
So I ask, what can we do to make
our education suitable in this modern age? Because it doesn't make sense that
we learn something Google can solve for us. Therefore, teaching needs to evolve
with society's advancements and meet the current needs of students, and not be
fooled to teach in an old outdated way. It is time for critical thinking and
creativity to become the foundation of our education, and properly equip students
to obtain future they deserve.
Your introduction with the two alternate scenarios was really well narrated. How you directly spoke to us made it seem like we were actually there, stranded on an island. The paragraph structures may need some work, you don't need to split up some of the smaller paragraphs you have written. I am a bit confused as to what your thesis and topic is about. Are you telling us about the Internet changing the world in general, or how our education system should be changed? I also feel that you aren't really going anywhere with this speech. You are using lots of high level vocabulary (some of which I don't understand), but I don't see an answer to what you are trying to explain. Try to tone down some of the wording, and make the intro and conclusion clearer and related to each other (conclusion restates and wraps up thesis).
ReplyDeleteThe introduction for your speech is veru appealing. It made me wnt to continue listening. However, the introduction is a little misleading, along with the 6th paragraph. Maybe you could try to explain some of the connections. Also, you should add some transitions btween ideas to improve the clarity of your speech. Nevertheless, you speech is very interesting and relatable.
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